Score: 7

"hmm"

submission: MGS: Flash Collab DISC 01

date: July 13, 2008

The animation wasn't bad, the content just didn't reach my expectations. You should be spending less time animating, and more time writing funny and uncommon jokes. Cock jokes? Are you 12 years old or something?

Everyone is asking for the animators to remove them, but NO, the animators want to be smartasses and keep them coming ¬.¬ Let's get over that shit, and start the true smart jokes where you think a bit to get to the end...

Score: 9

"Getting better"

submission: Base 17 ::03::

date: June 26, 2008

Character experssions (like amazment) need to be delivered more abruptly but not so artificially. Someone who doesn't know fear, who can't be sad or angry, can't really get surprised from hearing they're breaking out, even though he lost a friend.

Year 2105? We're more around year 2010 or something, didnt' find anything that technological so far. The backgrounds need to be worked on. The music is well chosen. You still need to work on animations, and trying to sync lip movement with the actual voice acting.

Deliver the plot a little better by making sure the voice actors undertand how the plot is progressing. Faces are perfect, but the bodies need to be improved a little bit. Smooth animation is still a bit rare in some parts of the anime. Keep it up though, you've done far better since Base 17.01

Score: 9

"Wow"

submission: Base 17 ::02::

date: June 26, 2008

Great Story, Great Ending, Great Animation.

Things you need improved just by a little bit are: Experessing certain emotions (when his eye went all wide and his eyes started shaking, that was kinda creepy looking :P).

And character animations. This series seems to be mainly fighting oriented rather than just talking and talking. So you'll need to thoroughly work on getting smoother fighting animations, and also when he walks, you can improve a bit his foot animations ;) Overall, this was better than the first episode. It's a 5/5 ;)